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    dots Submission Name: Accidental suicide of my minddots
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    Author: MCSadge
    Elite Ratio:    0.94 - 5/2/2
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       I usually write poems around a phrase or thought that pops into my mind. The thought was: Accidental suicide... I extended the title to fit the poem...


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    dotsAccidental suicide of my minddots
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    Streaming slowly through my brain
    Is a single unnoticed thought
    Trying to reach my pulsating vein
    A battle will need to be fought

    Accidental suicide of my mind
    Every clever thought dissipated
    I open my eyes but feel blind
    My dark side has been emancipated

    The devil is smiling at me and waiting
    For my weak willpower to bail
    but my vein is courageously stuttering
    I’m not ready for my journey to hell

    A laughter escapes my bitter lips
    The sound is oddly unfamiliar
    Now on my skin I feel his cold fingertips
    I like the sensation, this I find peculiar

    The truth is he’s already taken over me
    There was never a battle to be fought
    There is no stuttering vein within me
    He dried it up and tied it in a mystical knot

    My struggle was simply an illusion
    The devil loves his cruel games
    Claiming my tender soul was his mission
    Oh yes, the devil loves his cruel games

    He watches my horror as I realize
    That I am under his woven spell
    Yet I’m strangely unwilling to undo the ties
    Although I hear the echoed cries of those in hell





    Submitted on 2009-07-24 13:06:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks Sharon. Your review actually made me see my poem through a different light. You went deeper in the meaning and it made me see more to it. It's crazy how poems can be interpreted differently.
    | Posted on 2009-07-25 00:00:00 | by MCSadge | [ Reply to This ]
      I find this poem to reflect the forces of good and evil, as you elucidate, "the devil loves his cruel games." I get the concept of a demonic influence over you that you are forced to battle with in your mind but you manage to undo its ties. The "ties", to me reflects the things that held you down or that had you wrapped up that made thinking logically almost an impossible task. Though not intentionally, your mind was deprived of thought as you fell deeper into what seemed like a curse, as the end result you surmounted. I love your creative choice of words and I thought the entire piece flowed beautifully. The rhyme scheme was amazing in each stanza. Really Really GREAT piece Maika I loved it.
    | Posted on 2009-07-24 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]



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