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    dots Submission Name: Feel My Words (Part 1)dots
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    Author: Logic
    ASL Info:    24/M
    Elite Ratio:    2.04 - 68/53/34
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 79
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    dotsFeel My Words (Part 1)dots
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    But war is needed
    No Utopia in our futures
    Just hope that we live long enough to acknowledge time in past tense
    Described with participle's, actions
    Functioning heart still beating in exoskeleton; breaking apart
    Rib cage shattering with multiple hair line fractures
    Cranium expanding to mass capacity
    Simile supernova, energy expendable, spent and exploded
    No, I'm after the reality, l, so life afters'
    Open your eyes and think
    Read, imagine, listen
    These words are strung together by the vision in my mind, the lessons I have learned
    The praying in the dark
    Violins, pianos music notes exploding from my mouth and nostrils
    I write inspired by the stars, the colors of the clouds
    The distance between the horizon and my heart




    Submitted on 2009-07-24 20:04:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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