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HAHAHAHAHAHA


Author: MyWorld
ASL Info:    21/M/IN
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76 /99 /87
Words: 184
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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I just changed the word 'and' to 'but'... That's the most revision you're getting out of me.


HAHAHAHAHAHA


I'm maniacal like I might go psycho anytime, yo.
I try to smite my mind but I find no
Drugs that'll surely get the job done
I've got only one; trust-worthy
Must hurry, just for me, we just touch and be up
No worries, but, what's your story?
I never began to depend on someone
For the state of my mind so quickly
What I find is so sickening
But, it's better than antibiotics
Or all the white blood cells in me
It's not like I'm psychotic
I just can't stand not winning
And, friend, this soul is kin to me
Just when I begin to think I be
Rational, I lose my mind
Compassion?! Hell, I've got screws loose inside
But, when I prove what I
Swore to you that I
Knew as soon as I laid eyes
We'll scar the face of the earth
Everyday since birth, we've just been waiting
Well, instead of wanting, I'm taking.
If you listen to one thing that I'm saying
Make it this

LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE




Submitted on 2009-07-25 15:24:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Not exactly my fave read, but it is well written. I don't like the huge last line, I think you could probably put like
Love (repeated)
or something.
| Posted on 2009-07-27 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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