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    dots Submission Name: Unspoken Secretsdots
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    Author: grimmreaper
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 122/43/23
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 561
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       its in the title. pain of my unspocken secret


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    dotsUnspoken Secretsdots
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    Open wounds of merciless pain
    Lay bear on my thighs
    Speaking the pain
    Which I cannot express
    Through tears alone

    My broken heart
    Sits crushed inside my chest
    Like shattered glass on the floor
    Pieces so small
    They pierce through my skin
    Like slivers of misery
    Unable to be picked out

    Small tear drops of unspoken fear,
    Slide through my sore fingers
    Which I use to cover my face of shame
    Leaving me unable
    To speak of my past

    Raw sores spread across my arms
    Where I attempted
    To wipe away the pain
    Born from my unspoken secrets
    Which I keep hidden deep within me

    Acting like radiation
    My untold secrets slowly eats me apart
    From inside out
    Leaving burn marks on my body
    That remind me each day
    Of what you did to me




    Submitted on 2009-07-26 00:29:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this is heart wrenching! AMAZING I like how you begin and slowly work your way to the end, ending it with

    Leaving burn marks on my body
    That remind me each day
    Of what you did to me

    Amazing post, more amazed that no one else has commented. I tell ya this site use to be so different! Also I wanted to mention I saw NO misspelled words or words out of place your working on this and I give you kudos for that

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-27 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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