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    dots Submission Name: ESdots

    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1213
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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    Clique-ish split ends
    frayed friends
    spend countless hours
    in cyber theropy
    crying about
    self appointed
    pose like overweight models
    unable to hear the laughing
    through the static of there idealistic cantor
    Hear one, hear all
    why should I listen to the unripe fruit
    of a child fed by frustration not occurrence
    Life lessons from the tender feet of who..you,
    I think not
    My feet are worn from life scorn
    vengeance and penance
    vengeance and penance
    vengeance and penance
    that's the circle of life
    I pledge allegiance to life, love and belly buttons the rest of you can piss off
    and creep back into your
    crawl space of an existence
    the closed walls of your life
    are the coffins of your empty tomorrows

    Submitted on 2009-07-26 00:32:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, if this is what I think it's about, ouch to the group you are addressing, well even if it's not what I think it's about still ouch to them.
    theropy should be therapy
    thats the only thing that /needs/ correcting (unless it was intentional)
    I would make
    My feet are worn from life scorn
    My feet are worn from life scorned
    seems like it would work better (in my head.)
    | Posted on 2009-07-27 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]

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