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    dots Submission Name: "The Untitled" A collaboration by Sou andots

    Author: soudglam
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 314
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots"The Untitled" A collaboration by Sou andots

    Laying here heeding the mesmerizing tunes playing
    As time changes I'm slowly fading
    My mind begins to wander off straying
    To a place I've never known before

    Lately it seems that I lock my thoughts
    Tightly bound behind closed doors
    Hoping they never find me
    So how bad can it really be?

    All my life has been a race
    At a speed of light's pace
    Haunted by a face
    Hanging my head in disgrace
    Searching for a secret hiding place

    I've always been trying to get ahead of my mind
    Yet never fail to find myself one step behind
    Maybe if I make it to the finish line first
    I'll finally quench that unruly thirst
    And won't end up going insane
    From thoughts that appear within the maze
    Woven through the minds and craze

    Then my mind catches up with me
    Pushing me to rages as wild as December seas
    Until I collapse
    Allowing my mind to control me again no lessons learned
    That's when my life takes a drastic turn

    No longer can I see the sweet girl
    Jaywalking ahead as my mind lingered behind
    Now back to the old me a suspicious mind
    This feeling, I can't run no more
    Has become too hard to ignore

    It's now time for me face it all
    Though the very idea makes my skin crawl
    This time I'll stand and raise my head tall
    Or am I again heading for a fall?

    They say that only through this strife
    I will be able to survive and live this 'life'
    So here am I slowing my pace down
    Allowing my soul to connect with my mind
    Hoping they finally sympathize and catch the light

    Cause all that I ever wanted was to break free
    Pick up those scattered pieces and just be me<>

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