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    dots Submission Name: Incredulitydots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 414
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Incredulity


    I draw in oxygen
    The sweet and foul odours
    The same as you
    I breathe
    And in its life giving rapport
    I exist
    Of blood exchanges in corpuscle energies
    Transmitted
    Maintains
    Thoughts awareness and grasp
    On immediacy
    Existential
    In its poetry

    Life

    But it is with a sense of the incredulous
    In which I view
    Human life
    Separated as we are to self indulgence
    Family units
    Singular identities
    Arrogant; self-centred; egoisms
    Of division

    View as we do Individualities
    And not an Earth bound community

    And I have to ask myself
    What has “life” been replaced with
    Because “life” by this our modern definition of
    Is a pitifully poor excuse
    And a pathetic attempt
    At living

    And our banal self-sacrament
    To something greater than this
    Is a cosmic joke
    While the isolation for us all merely deepens
    We defend our own

    View as we do Individualities
    And not an Earth bound community

    These edicts of capitalist religions
    Ply us with the answers to nothing
    But keep us going
    And ever entering the supermarket cathedrals
    Of our faith in God and Money

    We; the human commune
    Are torn apart from fellowship
    By the unrequited need to survive
    In a world that makes us pay its price
    For existence

    And all, all are so enamoured of cultural surety
    That this could be, the only way to be
    That we drown and survive
    Between riches and poverty

    View as we do Individualities
    And not an Earth bound community

    It is a sickened and dire state in which we find ourselves
    Yet still clinging desperately
    To our only explanation of ourselves
    This feeding upon a planets wealth
    To support our own twisted vision
    Of ourselves

    And beneath the black blood of society
    The cancer grows
    For deep in our hearts each one of us knows
    The inalienable right
    The potential of every Earth born child

    I look on with Incredulity
    At the sheer volume of greed and waste
    That humanity accepts
    As being “normal”

    View as we do Individualities
    And not an Earth bound community

    I draw in oxygen
    The sweet and foul odours
    The same as you
    I breathe
    And in its life giving rapport
    I exist
    Of blood exchanges in corpuscle energies
    Transmitted
    Maintains
    Thoughts awareness and grasp
    On immediacy
    Existential
    In its poetry

    Life












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      A little pessimistic, otherwise it is interesting to read. I enjoy your style of prose, but "corpuscle" is the one word I dislike because it has terrible syllabic flow.

    Keep on Writing!
    | Posted on 2009-07-27 00:00:00 | by Nathaufein | [ Reply to This ]


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