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    dots Submission Name: Silent Conversationsdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Silent Conversations

    The wind is up today
    Coastal clouds
    Playing tag with dust devils
    On the shimmering bent mirages
    Wavering their uncertainty of heat
    Where the sea rolls its ice cream caps
    Cool in the blue hinted sweeps of grey

    In the chill air con bar
    We sat upon empty stools
    The languid condensations of beer
    Trickling their refreshments
    Of cool back of the throat smiles

    I hold converse with the vacant air
    While every vacant seat
    Longs to have you safely ensconced
    And listen to silent conversations
    But they watch instead my empty stare

    The wind is up today
    Carrying beach kites dancing in acrobat wheels
    While unstrung gulls rock unsteady
    On the gusts of southern Sarah
    And the dust devils dance their own display
    Of hot dry air

    The gold lustre slowly sipped
    With the curling tongs of cigarettes
    And the deep dark amber of ancient teak
    Thinks of auburn caught in a giggle
    Rests upon my elbows
    With unsteady poise

    The wind is up today
    Sneaking through niches and humming to itself
    A song that I wish would carry her voice
    And the dust devils tweak and twirl at the sky
    But not with any dance of mine
    I sit and hold silent conversations
    With pillaged and abandoned chairs

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