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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Tissue




    Do you sleep as I do
    Bent upon a dream that breaks you
    Lean back in a whiskey stupor
    What the hell where these dreams ever made for

    To burn in flightless wings
    Angel kissed with Friday night wishings
    And take the bitterness pill that life has in hand
    But never understand

    Let the rain fall on your window
    If the glass ever would remind you
    Of tears that I shed
    Are they now a romance of dissent










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      i had the weirdest dream last night - that i had a wife and it all ended rather horribly and dramatically. the particulars of the imagery and situation on how it came to be, i can't remember, but the feeling is much how this piece resonates with me - encapsulated in your last line - dissension, troubled sleep, and wishful thinking in spiralling flight.

    i'm not sure where i'm going with this comment.
    | Posted on 2009-08-03 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]


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