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    dots Submission Name: I am who you see...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Rant/Mirror or Mask
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       Life is tough


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    dotsI am who you see...dots
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    I'm all those people you see during your day.
    I'm part of the group who eats their feelings
    Then I'm on other side of that "social chain"
    I'm in the anorexia category
    You'll also see me in the 'wanna be" section...
    Always trying to find my place..
    Always searching in the wrong places...
    Feeling trapped
    Yet too free, its unsafe
    For this personality I have..
    Not knowing where to turn day after day..
    To either go from eating my feelings
    Or to... being those whom do not eat at all




    Submitted on 2009-07-26 13:45:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The anorexia part you should get fixed. But there isn't any reason to 'fit in' It doesn't help you find a job, it doesn't help you keep a house. I don't know if 'whom' is the right word in the last sentence, but its a good poem.
    | Posted on 2009-07-28 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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