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    dots Submission Name: My Lifedots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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       shrug... I don't know anymore

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    dotsMy Lifedots

    Your life twisted up into one story
    Then onto the next...

    Hold up!

    We've still got more in store for you..
    Don't slip up now

    You could just loose it all.

    And what is "all" you ask?

    All of what you've worked so hard for..
    The name you try so dam hard to stand up to..

    That image you want to be seen as..
    yet your life ... my life

    Just another simple story..
    Waiting to be told..

    All that awaits is ears that will actually listen..
    People who actually care..

    For its not the pain that as me sitting in front of my desk top computer

    Its not these tears that have me cry out so hard at night

    Its the silence that gets to me..
    The echoing
    of the keys as I am typing..

    The consistency of it.. of it all...

    "Trying so dam hard...".

    Yet ending up back where I started...

    Submitted on 2009-07-26 13:54:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really connected with this poem. I really get the part about ending back up where you started, it's a very real statement. good job and thanks.
    | Posted on 2009-07-27 00:00:00 | by JakeHawk | [ Reply to This ]

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