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    dots Submission Name: Wife...dots
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    Author: Rainmaker
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 45/50/19
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 563
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    Description:
       Found some random papers in my flat - this was on one of them. It has quite an ugly - but yet truthful story of what some women has for their lives. So if you don't like the truth and pain in the world - don't read further.

    For those who understand that it is controversial poem - happy readings.. I hope :D


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    dotsWife...dots
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    Spin spin
    'Round 'n' 'round
    Ultimately hitting
    The ground

    That's the life
    Of man's wife
    Between the cold
    'N' stove
    An iron glove

    Hate us for
    What we did
    Askin' for more?
    Your own bid

    Hit 'n' whine
    Your body is mine
    To mistreat
    To be painted
    In blue

    Such is the life
    Of man's bloody wife
    Pity her, mock her
    Free her
    Your time is gone




    Submitted on 2009-07-27 16:22:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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