Let Me Be Your Book

Author: Specdro ASL Info:    28/Of Course/NY Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 21 /53 /38 Words: 41

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Let Me Be Your Book

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My spine is cracked from old age, I have torn another tattered page. My words are worn and dimly faded, But quietly for you I have waited. My voice and purpose are still crystal clear. Forever, I will love you dear.

Submitted on 2009-07-28 19:47:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The idea of this particular poem I believe is a great starting place. However the doctor suess rhyming at the end of every rhyme made it feel incomplete and a little like a child wrote it. When you write something it doesn't always have to rhyme; I've learned that something can sound just as good or better in free verse. I'm not saying its bad but it could better, great start though! -Torcher Out

| Posted on 2009-07-30 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]

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