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Let Me Be Your Book


Author: Specdro
ASL Info:    28/Of Course/NY
Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 21 /53 /38
Words: 41
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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Description:


Inspired by my wife's love of books.


Let Me Be Your Book



My spine is cracked from old age,
I have torn another tattered page.
My words are worn and dimly faded,
But quietly for you I have waited.
My voice and purpose are still crystal clear.
Forever, I will love you dear.




Submitted on 2009-07-28 19:47:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The idea of this particular poem I believe is a great starting place.

However the doctor suess rhyming at the end of every rhyme made it feel incomplete and a little like a child wrote it. When you write something it doesn't always have to rhyme; I've learned that something can sound just as good or better in free verse.

I'm not saying its bad but it could better, great start though!

-Torcher Out
| Posted on 2009-07-30 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]


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