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so in love with you

Author: joezwells
Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 64 /79 /55
Words: 157
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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so in love with you

feelings uncontrolable
my love for you is endless
my happiness undeniable
without you im restless

when i look into your eyes
misery melts away
all my lonley cries
forgotten as you hold me at the end of the day

silently laying with you by my side
your warmth crashes down like the oceans tide
knowing that you love me is an overwhelming rush
baby i know you know, you were my first crush

wanting so bad for you to know how i feel
i didnt know how to tell you
i didnt know if "us" could be real
so i lied about the letter
pretending i didnt care
it turned out for the better
cause now we're standing here

me with you and you with me
theres no place else i'd rather be
im amazed by everything that you do
baby, im so in love with you

Submitted on 2009-07-29 01:17:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  OMG that is the cutest poem ever awww! I loved it Josie (: I hope that I could be in love as much as you are one day. ): that was just to cute love you long time.
| Posted on 2009-07-29 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]
  This piece is one that seems to express being driven, yet at the same time, enjoying the drive. I like it.
| Posted on 2009-07-29 00:00:00 | by thepowerglider | [ Reply to This ]

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