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    dots Submission Name: so in love with you dots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsso in love with you dots
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    feelings uncontrolable
    my love for you is endless
    my happiness undeniable
    without you im restless

    when i look into your eyes
    misery melts away
    all my lonley cries
    forgotten as you hold me at the end of the day

    silently laying with you by my side
    your warmth crashes down like the oceans tide
    knowing that you love me is an overwhelming rush
    baby i know you know, you were my first crush

    wanting so bad for you to know how i feel
    i didnt know how to tell you
    i didnt know if "us" could be real
    so i lied about the letter
    pretending i didnt care
    it turned out for the better
    cause now we're standing here

    me with you and you with me
    theres no place else i'd rather be
    im amazed by everything that you do
    baby, im so in love with you




    Submitted on 2009-07-29 01:17:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      OMG that is the cutest poem ever awww! I loved it Josie (: I hope that I could be in love as much as you are one day. ): that was just to cute love you long time.
    | Posted on 2009-07-29 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is one that seems to express being driven, yet at the same time, enjoying the drive. I like it.
    | Posted on 2009-07-29 00:00:00 | by thepowerglider | [ Reply to This ]


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