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    dots Submission Name: Walk backdots
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    Author: sober_x_smile
    ASL Info:    16/f/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 17/27/16
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWalk backdots
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    My love for you is never fading.
    As it stands my love I m forever yours
    My heart it flutters with in the wind
    When ever your around

    A day with you is like a soft mid-summers
    Eve; As the birds weave their enchanting song just for
    You ,and me

    Since, our time apart my day has turned to night fall.
    The leaves have fallen ,the flowers have wilted no longer
    Do the birds sing.

    My heart grieves and everyday I long for
    Your love…..
    Your touch….
    Your oh so gentle kiss…
    Wont you walk back once more my love?
    So I may feel my heart stir once more.





    Submitted on 2009-07-29 03:25:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful writing! I could feel the love and the longing of your love to return to you. Is this song lyrics? I could actually hear as such. Either way great job, and by all means, Keep on writing.
    | Posted on 2009-07-29 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]


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