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We are never so much more than empty space- flimsy balloons of skin- and rich, pungent river mud, carved by celestial currents. I met a man of complex lines, and elaborately placed strings. He called himself a composer, but he was just a composition of God, singing the message of dna, given to nothing, but instruction. I wonder if buried beneath ground and disgust, even worms are tormented with foolish dreams of transformation, becoming the fearfully erotic, archetype of snakes. Even ground locked snakes must look like gods to the worms that dwell beneath, who dine on what is left for flesh to find of the world's of men. No wonder Eve listened to the whispers of strange snakes- especially when one said, "I can make you more, more than this." I, too, have longed to be more than this, to rise above myself- more than truth will allow. To be someone worth loving. Someone worthy of coaxing you to let go of safety, and hold on to me. Foolishly, I thought I had risen, too, above a mistress of convenience. But I am what I have always been just the closest umbrella on the shelf by water logged hands. I know patience can weigh a man down, heavy as any depression. And you can rest off the backroads in my arms, in the narrow detour of possibility. But know that you were wrong about the convenience of romance. You are most inconveniant my white dove of temptation, my back door Van Gogh. You are fire in my hands, burning, consuming, hard to hold, impossible to control, scarring, blinding. My faculties fail, my heart shrivels, as skin thickens, then melts. All the witless moths, drawing near, my truth illuminated for a hypocritical court, by your brutal beauty wearing away at my nakedness, but it's so hard to put you down or look away. Men are given to multi-choice convenience, but women, though they may appreciate sampling and variety, are given to selecting that which is closest to perfection, even if it is the hardest thing to obtain. Guess that's why Eve couldn't keep her hands off the succulent offerings of the forbidden tree, while Adam was satisfied eating lesser fruit, because it was easy. And I wonder how it is that you never noticed, more convenient men, that I have turned away, in my desire to burn into you. |
...This was a lot better than I was expecting it to be, when reading the title. I am so very pleasantly surprised. Part of me wants you to come back to the 'man of complex lines' more heavily in the second half of the poem, to connect him in better with the ending message. The other part of me is too busy reading the 'heavy patience' stanza and saying-- [censored], that was good. A few mildly awkward/boring lines here and there...'of the world's of men', 'my truth illuminated for a hypocritical court,' the two stanzas directly after Van Gogh. But on the whole, a very good poem. Nice work. | Posted on 2009-08-02 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ] | |