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    dots Submission Name: End Gamedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsEnd Gamedots
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    End Game


    Daylight, collected by ancient violins
    Breaks a cadaverous rhythm
    From dreams of a crashing heart
    And all encumbered the features of its crag
    Rages pitiful

    It is a sigh, which leaves the unsleeping cushion
    To bury knuckles in tired eyes
    Daylight
    With the auspices of its vendetta hanging cryptic
    In riddled made promises
    By the sun catches
    Nothing

    The mirror in its jaundice of coffee, continues
    And stares melancholy from its own reflection
    Hangs bloodless
    Daylight
    In its search for continuum
    And its succession to hope
    Clings remorseless
    To love
    In a steadfast silence
    Holds its will to its own faith in strength

    And so anchored on peace, the day begins in patience

    And cast as grain to the eternal dusts
    The ancient chord of violins
    With sorrows bow draws upon the strings
    Of my heart

    Daylight
    And with its first thought; turned on love











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