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    dots Submission Name: Envoke medots

    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEnvoke medots

    I am sitting outside the burning door
    The charred ashes can't burn my skin
    The smoke takes that pain from me
    I am sinking into
    And throughout what was
    choking red burning eyes
    The fade like a tide in receed
    Take the pain slowly
    To me
    Again and i burn
    Inhale the black swirl of promise two hits
    My head sinks
    into numb
    The baby she screams
    From behind the closed door
    That room is still buring
    Iwant to save her
    But i just
    Sit on the floor
    Breathing this smoke
    For it's promise
    Take me
    Make me not real
    As a doll inanimate
    So there is nothing to feel
    I cough
    I bleed
    I need oh i need
    To know
    The she screams
    From behind this burning door
    That is closed behind me
    No more
    And i ache from inside
    Baby girl
    Has she died?
    Breathe that promise
    Wave good-bye
    And smoke for a numbing gaurentee
    Swirling spirit
    Envoke me.

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