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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Shatter


    Scarlet petals they fall
    With the iron tracts they leave
    Busted on the tears of snow
    Coverlet for our memory

    Who else is there to blame
    For the silence in the night
    The bottle empty of its whisky
    Rushes headlong to the wall

    But sleepless rests within these trembling hands
    To die one more time
    As I close my eyes
    You never knew its taste upon my lips

    And now in the darkness
    I can at least see my heart
    Iron petal it falls
    In scarlet tracts






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      Iron petal that falls in scarlet tracts, a bleeding heart. Someone tough on the outside but suffering on the inside. That was such a beautiful methaphor. Of course I am speaking of the last stanza. I think it was just amazingly written. The silence in the night he/she blames him/herself for their lost love. That person either failed to protect them or feels it is his/her fault that the other person was drove away. And of course that person is a raging alcholic so my guess his/she got a little punchy when they were drunk. Such a well written piece I will have to read another
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    Yates
    | Posted on 2009-07-30 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]


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