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    dots Submission Name: Changedots
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    Author: ares_nuke_1
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 106/151/76
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Want change?
    They give reassurance that it will get better,
    but they know nothing of truth, only lies.
    Want blame?
    blame only the liars,
    not the ones who expose them.
    Want truth?
    It's hard to see down in this hole
    that we have dug ourselves in,
    Want love?
    If you can't find it from within,
    then maybe you should go without.
    Want redemption?
    Cry out for help,
    and hope this time they listen.




    Submitted on 2009-07-31 00:43:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very interesting piece, I liked it. Not sure if it is just me, but I feel this could be a lyric, I could hear it in a singer songwriter fashion. I will be reading more of your work.
    Keep on writing!
    Dawn
    | Posted on 2010-09-13 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. Rather pessimistic but closer to reality. I liked the way you expanded on all of the first thoughts about change. Visually, I might have placed spaces between the thoughts. I'm not sure if the love clause really expands upon the original idea but, it is my favorite because of the word pun.
    | Posted on 2009-08-01 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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