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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    It is the excitement;
    The thrill...
    Of a secret.
    The promise of burning,
    away regret.
    And i stand in the moment:
    Oh remember this here and now!
    Think,
    of everyone:
    Who just wants,
    Another one.
    It is not enough.
    It is,
    never,
    enough.
    Indulge with me.
    In ecstacy.
    Of selfishness...
    I want it just to,
    Have it.
    Because it's,
    Part, of me.
    Like the taste of,
    sweet tears;
    kissing my cheek.
    Wanting a want from:
    Somebody,
    Indulge me-
    Love me-
    Hurt me and break me.
    I like what they do;
    It hurts so good.
    I want more.
    Want some more.
    I stand, here...
    Because it is the thrill,
    Of my secret.
    My own;
    I can keep it.
    Oh the promise of a burn.
    And the slipping,
    Of regret.
    I am, I AM!
    Bleeding here,
    helpless?
    Keep me standing tall,
    In a whirl,
    Of my secret.




    Submitted on 2009-07-31 01:58:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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