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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 736
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    Description:
       Wrote this while camping. I'm still working on it but here is the first draft.


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    dotsImagesdots
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    It's been a while
    since I have filed
    these images away

    they sat in dust
    in mold and rust
    keeping from the fray

    in violent minds
    and ISpy finds
    I'm sure they'll finally stay

    for you're the thought
    of why I rot
    you turn these colours grey

    But if I try
    I'm sure I'll fly
    In her arms one day

    I'll show that you
    were not the true
    girl meant to stay

    So here's my veins
    Just take the reins
    So I may finally say

    It's been a while
    Since I have filed
    These images away.




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