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    dots Submission Name: The Pulsedots

    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 29/75/68
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Pulsedots

    It's hiding,
    I swear it.
    Your still there,
    I hope it.
    Your breath is faint,
    It's gotta be.
    Your heart still beats,
    as does mine.
    You can't be dead,
    it's hiding.

    Submitted on 2009-07-31 18:11:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i don't see this as literally DEAD...like in life is gone...but dead emotionally....almost...but there is a pulse...like there is that significant other who can bring back the heartbeat...

    thump thump......thump thump....thump thump....

    | Posted on 2012-04-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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