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    dots Submission Name: Leavingdots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 698
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    Description:
       I'm in a writing sort of mood tonight.


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    dotsLeavingdots
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    Because I'll leave and be gone
    And you'll never know
    I'll pack before the dawn
    Just to let go

    I can start all over
    in a City that never sleeps
    with your three leaf clover
    and your endless weeps

    So wish me the best
    When I spread my wings and fly
    I'm sure I'll be blessed
    By the salt filled tears you cry






    Submitted on 2009-08-01 02:09:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it is the familiarity of the sentiments expressed here that make this resonate in spite of the somewhat overfamiliar phrasing.

    I like:
    with your three leaf clover
    and your endless weeps

    ~Chris
    | Posted on 2011-05-22 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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