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    dots Submission Name: Leavingdots

    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I'm in a writing sort of mood tonight.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Because I'll leave and be gone
    And you'll never know
    I'll pack before the dawn
    Just to let go

    I can start all over
    in a City that never sleeps
    with your three leaf clover
    and your endless weeps

    So wish me the best
    When I spread my wings and fly
    I'm sure I'll be blessed
    By the salt filled tears you cry

    Submitted on 2009-08-01 02:09:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it is the familiarity of the sentiments expressed here that make this resonate in spite of the somewhat overfamiliar phrasing.

    I like:
    with your three leaf clover
    and your endless weeps

    | Posted on 2011-05-22 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]

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