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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

    Above and yet below

    Tell me what it was like above the snow...
    Where the sun and the rain would shed light and ripples
    On the softness of water lilies and disclosed worlds;
    On the fair featured faces mirrored in a steel of harm's way...

    Or was it a pillow of feathers I wonder on the duality
    Insanity or reality, the-never-one, the-never-wed,
    But quite...deceptive in their ballroom perplexed with doll strings
    For us streamers.

    For neither your voice can I recall...there are voiceS now
    And I'm deaf whether your thoughts would look for me,
    With your hands reaching, your tears preaching, still...
    Your feet follow me but I am gone once again streamed out.

    The clock ticks with surprise...diligent in condolences
    For I am no longer able to stop...the time I am given.
    The sheets shrivel and curl...fragranced with old epiphanies
    For I cannot oblige the nightscape and leap.

    Trapped in shape, form and ... worn out expressions
    With words and close captioned urges bubbles within bubbles,
    With insanity or reality, the-never-one, the-never-wed,...
    Waiting for you to tell me what it was like above the snow...

    Above and yet below

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*





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      Truly haunting... and perfect metaphor ... beautifully and masterfully written.
    | Posted on 2009-08-02 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't say I get it, I like it nonetheless. The dreamy state of the writing, perhaps between insanity and reality, fits well with the images, which are original and interesting on their own. Your work is a pleasure.
    | Posted on 2009-08-01 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
       It's meant to be never-one - as in: never a singularity, one, unity - ergo the next phrase: never-wed - again meaning: never in harmony.
    | Posted on 2009-08-01 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This excellent poem reminds me that we are all trapped by our human frailties and limitations, yet fantacize with unlimited vision. This poem is so intense and vivid in its philosophical vision.

    The final stanza is stunning;

    "Trapped in shape, form and ... worn out expressions
    With words and close captioned urges bubbles within bubbles,
    With insanity or reality, the-never-one, the-never-wed,...
    Waiting for you to tell me what it was like above the snow..."

    In America, the phrase is "never-won, never-wed"!

    Nice work, Sandra!
    | Posted on 2009-08-01 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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