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tell her

Author: joezwells
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tell her

empty yet full
alive but dull
daily routine pounded in her skull
how much longer till she hits the floor?

some say now
some say never
deep down she knows
she cant keep this up forever

it surrounds her
it taunts and drawls her in
it waits patiently for that moment
when she forgets its her darkest sin

its a constant battle
its abrasive and wrong
if shes looses a round
she'll whatch her whole world explode and be gone

so tell her now
how can you help?
tell her she can do it
just remember how it felt

remember how it felt
to lay on the floor
useless and lifeless
just an empty soul

everyday not knowing
if you'd remember where you went
every week getting paid
but your checks already spent

remember all the regrets
and the feelings of neglect
the misery and pain
and the bills that collect

remember not remembering
all the days lost
months dissapear
not realizing the cost

think of the good
and how soberiety is misunderstood
look at what you have
now take that drink if you think you should

Submitted on 2009-08-02 00:20:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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