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    dots Submission Name: tell her dots

    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotstell her dots

    empty yet full
    alive but dull
    daily routine pounded in her skull
    how much longer till she hits the floor?

    some say now
    some say never
    deep down she knows
    she cant keep this up forever

    it surrounds her
    it taunts and drawls her in
    it waits patiently for that moment
    when she forgets its her darkest sin

    its a constant battle
    its abrasive and wrong
    if shes looses a round
    she'll whatch her whole world explode and be gone

    so tell her now
    how can you help?
    tell her she can do it
    just remember how it felt

    remember how it felt
    to lay on the floor
    useless and lifeless
    just an empty soul

    everyday not knowing
    if you'd remember where you went
    every week getting paid
    but your checks already spent

    remember all the regrets
    and the feelings of neglect
    the misery and pain
    and the bills that collect

    remember not remembering
    all the days lost
    months dissapear
    not realizing the cost

    think of the good
    and how soberiety is misunderstood
    look at what you have
    now take that drink if you think you should

    Submitted on 2009-08-02 00:20:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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