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These moments

Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
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Words: 132
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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So, I was thinking about love... and how far you can take things before someone doesn't love you anymore...
You can do just about anything, but what would it really take? Everybody has a breaking point....

Be honest and tell me what you think about it.

If someone I loved, or said I loved, murdered someone else, I can honestly say that the word love would start to look a little flimsy...

These moments

In a second, I can lie
I can speak the white words
I can hear the angels talking
Each one wanting to be heard
In a minute, I can deceive you
I can see the devil smile
In this artificial game
My soul will be on trial
In an hour, I can betray you
I can steal your very trust
and when you figure out my plan
you'll look at me with disgust
In these moments I can lose you
I can let the evil win
I can forget about my heart
Let it be swallowed up in sin
In this life I can leave you
I can forget what is inside
the question is, would you still love me
or would you rather see me die?

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