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    dots Submission Name: These momentsdots
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    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 748
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    Description:
       So, I was thinking about love... and how far you can take things before someone doesn't love you anymore...
    You can do just about anything, but what would it really take? Everybody has a breaking point....

    Be honest and tell me what you think about it.

    If someone I loved, or said I loved, murdered someone else, I can honestly say that the word love would start to look a little flimsy...


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    dotsThese momentsdots
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    In a second, I can lie
    I can speak the white words
    I can hear the angels talking
    Each one wanting to be heard
    In a minute, I can deceive you
    I can see the devil smile
    In this artificial game
    My soul will be on trial
    In an hour, I can betray you
    I can steal your very trust
    and when you figure out my plan
    you'll look at me with disgust
    In these moments I can lose you
    I can let the evil win
    I can forget about my heart
    Let it be swallowed up in sin
    In this life I can leave you
    I can forget what is inside
    the question is, would you still love me
    or would you rather see me die?








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