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I believe!


Author: dismentled
ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625 /583 /217
Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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For the one I love!*Jessie Sky Opilo*


I believe!



I write a word
and give it meaning
i do it all
just for you;
I write a line
with all my feeling
from my heart
I see it through

I speak a verse
in subtle silence
in a memory
you'd not want to undo;
I speak it allegorically
as if you don't
already know
what I yearn to prove

so take this heart
that is my verse
and lock it in
your precious chest;
and take this line
that holds my soul
knowing you only
deserve my best!

I'll Always love you
I'll Always want you
I need you like
the air I breathe!
I'll Always be there
I'll Always care
quite likely the only
thing I do believe!!!

XOXO
XOXO










Submitted on 2009-08-02 22:05:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is sooo beautiful,
I think it might be my favorite of yours,
this write makes my heart smile <3
I love you so much!
&& I love that you finally feel comfortable enough to write about our love without worrying about it sounding "corny", not only does it not sound like that at all, it's REALLY clear how much you care <3.
this write couldn't be anymore perfect :]
I love you so much baby!
always & forever & in whatever follows as well <3
| Posted on 2009-09-12 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow That brought tears to my eyes.. Honestly, It was that good. It reminded me of many things my ex- husband ,my daughter , My husband now, that I love so dear. I never loved my ex that much but the man I am maried to now I love him deeply. And my 4 going on 5 year old daughter......

Beautiful what a beautiful poem. You got some really good talent.

Thankyou!

Totojane03
| Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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