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    dots Submission Name: I believe!dots

    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1346
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       For the one I love!*Jessie Sky Opilo*

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    dotsI believe!dots

    I write a word
    and give it meaning
    i do it all
    just for you;
    I write a line
    with all my feeling
    from my heart
    I see it through

    I speak a verse
    in subtle silence
    in a memory
    you'd not want to undo;
    I speak it allegorically
    as if you don't
    already know
    what I yearn to prove

    so take this heart
    that is my verse
    and lock it in
    your precious chest;
    and take this line
    that holds my soul
    knowing you only
    deserve my best!

    I'll Always love you
    I'll Always want you
    I need you like
    the air I breathe!
    I'll Always be there
    I'll Always care
    quite likely the only
    thing I do believe!!!


    Submitted on 2009-08-02 22:05:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is sooo beautiful,
    I think it might be my favorite of yours,
    this write makes my heart smile <3
    I love you so much!
    && I love that you finally feel comfortable enough to write about our love without worrying about it sounding "corny", not only does it not sound like that at all, it's REALLY clear how much you care <3.
    this write couldn't be anymore perfect :]
    I love you so much baby!
    always & forever & in whatever follows as well <3
    | Posted on 2009-09-12 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow That brought tears to my eyes.. Honestly, It was that good. It reminded me of many things my ex- husband ,my daughter , My husband now, that I love so dear. I never loved my ex that much but the man I am maried to now I love him deeply. And my 4 going on 5 year old daughter......

    Beautiful what a beautiful poem. You got some really good talent.


    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]

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