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    dots Submission Name: Wretched Timedots
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    Author: RenneLigh
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 312
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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        Vanity grows only more bitter at the knowledge of Time.


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    dotsWretched Timedots
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    Time.
    I fear you are my worst enemy
    Shame on you, indeed
    This mirror is your constant
    reminder of how your
    passing caress has
    tainted my heart
    my mind, my body
    These bones groan
    and crack your name
    for mercy from your
    onslaught
    Grant them mercy
    I bid thee, traitor
    It is the least you
    can do now that you had
    given me a taste of
    young silk and
    many an admirers' affection
    once so long ago.
    I demand for it back
    Yet you laugh
    and wash away with the wind.
    My heart is yours,
    I give it to you, but you
    are no man that will ever
    be so kind as to accept
    and in return bestow
    upon me what was
    what I wish still is.
    Shame on you.
    Shame on me for trolling after you.
    Shame on me a thousand more
    craters and river lines
    for weeping for
    your presence
    And a thousand more for
    pale powders to dust away the
    pain of your absence
    And I swear my skin is
    dead with heartache
    as well
    Look upon me Time
    behold what you have
    abandoned me with
    Dare you not pass again
    without a blessed gift for me
    in form of my ravishing self
    Do not pass me once more
    at all
    Once was quite enough
    if the result will be same
    Thus, at bay you must stay
    I reach with heavy hands for
    that powder
    That puff
    with the fading image of you
    and I will try to preserve
    But, no, Time
    do not pass me
    For I will surely find my self
    compelled to make you stay
    Under whatever cost




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