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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 327
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Unreadable ideograms
    Beaten thin leaf to tenuous holds
    Of failing parchments
    Brittle in their folds of tears

    Remember, they struggle for survival
    In clasps ever present
    Reverberate continual back down
    The long lost corridors
    Searching for the regurgitation of their meaning
    Black and white memories
    Of some sickness
    Which threw off kilter
    Every next days other day of life

    The heat of its brand, a whimper
    Kicked on late stirrings against a pillow sleeping
    Fizzog fierce of demons forming
    From an ugly defining rampage torturous

    No recommendation
    Other than a scar to pit against its will
    Other than the pain burns continual
    Of insubstantial rape
    Its shame to twist and wring the neck
    Till breathing burdened
    Utters not
    Its last and inconsequential gasp
    Released

    The lump constricted full of throat
    Strives to cough up on agonies point
    The vendetta it holds against the past
    And its freedom overburdened by desire

    Children, screaming into silence
    With a wish of blooded nails
    To scrub away the indelible marks
    And eaten hours
    Rips against the mirror inside a heart
    Cold implacable bleeds
    The warm vein of isolation
    Designs its unreadable ideograms
    There are no recommendations





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