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    dots Submission Name: I want to give my trinity todots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 36
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1712



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       Aug 2nd 2009 11:30pm


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    dotsI want to give my trinity todots
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    why do we still hold each other so?

    now that you did it, what did it mean?

    what am i to you?

    you don't want to say "I miss you, Jon".

    telling others you stopped because I said too much

    why do you still want to see me?

    are my feelings a game?

    a rook, a knight, a pawn?

    my feelings for you never changed

    about three weeks is when i felt i could take on the world

    now, you still kiss and comfort me

    it feels good but my heart knows it's hollow

    i want to say it, and i just did

    i don't care if you don't say it back

    it's what i need to do for my heart

    to let it know it's ok

    what my body and mind are doing

    why do i have to try so hard to justify what i do with you?

    take it, take me

    you're the only one i want to give my trinity to

    my mind, because you have a beautiful one too

    my heart, because you know how to make it warm with desire and love

    my body, because only you know what you see of it

    you called it art, there's nothing you'd rather touch?

    after you i want no other

    for they wouldn't appreciate it like you once did

    please take me forever

    we've both been hurt

    never again will we be used or lied to

    it together we adventure

    do it, do it for me

    do it because you want to too!




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      Very emotional, love is in your heart, showing appreciation, standing up for your feelings, given your all to this person, great poem

    Chris
    | Posted on 2009-08-06 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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