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Your Hold over Me

Author: heartless_
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Your Hold over Me

How do I begin this tale of the broken?
Do you remember how we met?
We went to the same school,
You had gone around with one of my friends.

We ran into each other during a camping trip.
With every day together I grew more attached.
Every second was like a dream for me,
One I never wanted to wake from.

Once we got back home though,
Problems arouse, gossip in a small town,
Causing us to fight more,
The distance grew each second.

You started to pull back from me,
I felt you slipping and then you were gone.
You gave me no chance for goodbye,
No chance to make things right.

You just gave up and walked out.
Tell me what it is you do to me?
After all the pain, all the lies
Why do I love you still?

Why is it impossible to forget you?
You showed little kindness to me,
Didn’t care about the tears
To you they meant victory.

You had finally broken the unbreakable,
Now sad and lost I wander alone.
Wondering with every passing second,
What it is you do to me?
Where did this hold come from?

Confused and alone I sit,
By myself how you intended for me to be.
For no one wants the bruised soul,
No one wants the shattered heart.

Do you even know what you do?

Submitted on 2009-08-05 16:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very emotional, you have special feelings for this person, each paragraph has a expression that you let out , this very most be close, good poem

| Posted on 2009-08-06 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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