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    dots Submission Name: Liar, Liardots
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    Author: Vermalin
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 15/29/21
    Words: 314
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
    Total Views: 1130
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLiar, Liardots
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    Walking on eggshells, paper thin,
    Painted with traces of ivory skin.
    The tender hearted dare to step
    Over the footfalls that have been made-
    These liars paths were spun from heartstrings...
    And with tracks of tears were laid.

    And when you leave, leave for me your silhouette;
    Paint it on the wall so I'll not soon forget.
    Although the feel of your skin can never be replaced,
    Perhaps a final memory can leave me at peace.

    These paper-thin hearts ignited with sparks,
    And ablaze, set our skin with a glow-
    In our love, we could never be made to believe
    That betrayal might loom underneath that glowing shroud
    That skin would tear so easily.
    We could be made to see, were we not so proud.

    Our hearts were not stone, only clay,
    To be molded into what we thought we wanted;
    Fingerprints ingrained, from flesh to soul, skin on skin
    Like the sweetest wine, we were left wanting more,
    Praying each time that the aftertaste would not be so bitter.

    The knowledge of good and evil was never good enough,
    Not when you were left knowing there was far more to learn.
    So you will keep welcoming the pain, hoping that someday
    Your skin will heal

    And all the scars will fade
    All your hopes will have been made
    All your promises fulfilled
    All the liars tongues will still
    That your clay heart will feel
    And all your skin shall heal.




    Submitted on 2009-08-05 20:52:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have to agree with Eliwife on her comments. The way you wrote this is, seriously, quite beautiful. I've read bad poems on here, and decent. Good, great, amazing-


    but this is lovely, magnificent and stands out like a flare tossed into a night sky.
    Hah, look at me, trying to spin clever words in compensation for the greatness above. Typical.


    Truly; well done.
    | Posted on 2010-03-29 00:00:00 | by KotaNashi | [ Reply to This ]
      God...everytime I read this I'm left with the same reaction.
    Awe.
    Seriously, the way you write just pulls you into what you are saying and makes it become who you are.
    While I'm reading that, I am feeling every bit of that poetry. It's provocative. I love it.

    I'll write more later, my brain is half awake. But seriously. I felt butterflies in my stomach after reading this.
    | Posted on 2009-10-18 00:00:00 | by Eyamma | [ Reply to This ]


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