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    dots Submission Name: papper dollsdots

    Author: cha
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 37/28/31
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotspapper dollsdots

    Write out your feelings,
    Write what you feel,
    What you know best,
    It isnt a test.
    No one will judge you,
    No one will care,
    Just sit and watch you in despare.
    no one to tell you your wrong,
    Just like your own paper dolls,
    Like a cardboard box,
    Doing nothing at all.
    Watching you with a gleam in their eyes,
    But the blades calling your name,
    Run away from the paper dolls,
    And make that blade,
    make it yours.
    Make it last forever,
    Make it cut deep enough,
    To slit that solid vaine.
    to make all the pain go away,
    For one second of eternity.

    Submitted on 2009-08-06 11:24:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Self mutilation.... *sighs* I've read enough of these to last a life time. But it was good, and I praise you for it. I think the last line could have been done without. It just didn't flow well with the rest of the poem. I like how you integrated paper dolls with the blade though. Very unique.
    | Posted on 2009-08-10 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]

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