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    Author: concrete_rose
    ASL Info:    31/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43/51/34
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    state of confusion, turmoiled inside
    fueled by this isolation
    trying to adapt to changes unforseen
    wanting bliss.

    Thinking relentless of a face,
    light eyes remnants of open seas
    washed into a soul, made anew.

    Days are long, time spirals into the same
    again the same, seeking the truth in another
    one seemingly close but still so far away.

    Never knowing what to disclose, what to reveal
    to one such spirit, only to say
    walk with this patiently,
    through the fields of youth.




    Submitted on 2009-08-06 18:03:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      GREAT !!!

    i loved this poem /.... so much imgragry and impact ../. this was my fav part:


    light eyes remnants of open seas
    washed into a soul, made anew.


    i really do like ...

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2009-08-08 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with lynn7; the last line would make an excellent title.

    This speaks so aptly of the energy and restlessness of adolescence and youth!

    This is excellent work, Rose!
    | Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice piece, I can relate in my own life. A good title might be your last line.

    Love and Peace,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2009-08-06 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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