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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 708
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1324



    Description:
       This is more of a rambling conversation put on paper infused with my own musings on the situation as it happened. This Is For My Wife :)


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    Nu uhs and uh huhs
    riding the short bus with old men staring you down
    & eating your trail mix while driving in circles
    & saving you the seat next to me each day..
    missing you when you're not there
    peacocks..nothing about cocks at all
    admission of feelings
    elevator music
    but the conversation keeps on
    wanting to hold you closer
    i need you so much closer
    why is there nothing to talk about
    because i'm crazy about you
    and i'm afraid it'll come out
    if I keep on the way that I do
    stop pretending to be a wall
    no I know you're not a wall
    but you're pretending to be a wall
    so stop holding me at bay
    just let me in to see
    what its like to be so close to you
    solar eclipses and knowing what I mean
    you get it better than I do
    and i'm the one rambling
    this could be a catastrophe
    I am wanting to hold you closer
    I need you so much closer
    why is there nothing to talk about
    because i'm crazy about you
    and i'm afraid it'll come out
    if I keep on the way that I do
    so tell me if you'd like to know
    what I want..
    where i'd like to go..




    Submitted on 2009-08-06 21:22:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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