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    dots Submission Name: CARNIVAL!dots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 29/75/68
    Words: 378
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 671
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    Bytes: 2743



    Description:
       fast, upbeat song thingy story/funny thing, yea.


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    dotsCARNIVAL!dots
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    1234
    cARNival!
    You're sitting in a bar
    but your all alone!
    Wishing for a song
    but your hearing's blown!
    And stop!
    What your doing.
    Over there.
    Get up,
    outta your chair.
    Look at the girl,
    twirlin' her hair.
    Wishin' she's alone,
    but she's with
    7
    other
    guys!
    And your wonderin' why
    It can't
    be
    me
    Just this one time!
    It's all a lie.
    So you stumble down the street
    lookin' like an idiot!
    You've played the game so long
    and your sick of it!
    So you move on over
    all quick and slick!
    And then you ask her
    her name.
    But then one of the 7 sock you
    and you think that's pretty lame.
    So you stand up,
    one last time,
    and you say hey
    I'll give it a try...
    *BADADADADADADA!*
    You hit 3 guys
    Straight in the eyes.
    They all go down
    but to your surprise...
    there's still 4 more guys!
    So you go into a bit of a trance...
    *BADADADADADADADADADADADADADADADADADA!*
    7 cool dudes
    in a pile.
    You look at the girl
    and she cracks a smile.
    You tell her that it's been awhile
    since you've seen
    such a smile.
    And she's just
    standin' there.
    Lookin' so cute,
    twirlin' her hair.
    So you take
    her
    to
    a
    hotel room!
    You're feelin' the groove
    so you make your move.
    You lift,
    up her skirt.
    And you feel the hurt.
    Cause you then realize...
    She's just another
    one of the guys!
    Hahahahahahaha!
    So you leave,
    dazed and confused.
    Runnin' down the stairs,
    feelin' the booze.
    Then you get outside,
    into the street.
    Then your hit by a car,
    driven by me!
    All coked up
    and nowhere to go.
    Just got back,
    from Mexico.
    So I park the car,
    and into the bar.
    Then the guy behind the counter asks me if I've seen a man,
    beat up 7 guys and didn't pay his tab.
    I looked at the bartender with a wild eye,
    breathed in deep and let out a sigh.
    Look now, I don't
    see much men
    So why don't you
    pour me up a white russian.
    That's the end of the story,
    Fin of the tale.
    And I'm sorry to say
    there ain't no morale.

    end
    finfinfin
    -eggshells-




    Submitted on 2009-08-06 21:27:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      LOL, I like it... it reminds me of the pretty things you can pick up on lower Bourbon Street in the early summer, if you've got enough balls to walk that far down for a "surprise package" later on... OI, I liked that part! I am always amused by a guy's complete near-hysteria when encountering another man who looks as pretty as his own sister.... ROFL!!! Personally, I like drag queens, and if I could be so lucky as to find a straight one to date, I could really expand my wardrobe (if we're the same size HAHAHA)...

    Anyway, cool little piece, it kinda reminded me of that Charlie Daniels one about the chick with the green teeth in the Mississippi bar.... I can't think of the name of it, but he chased 'em once around the parking lot, after he got out of the bar alive and back to his car.

    Cool write, loved reading it!
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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