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    dots Submission Name: Rape (NOT your average pity story)dots
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    Author: mojymo
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 50/59/41
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsRape (NOT your average pity story)dots
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    Being raped is just one more way of saying,
    "I'm weak."
    Why couldn't you defend yourself?!
    I taught you how to stand tall
    when you were just a child!
    I taught you everything from sex
    to algebra!
    And THIS is the terror you come home with.
    You've made my life this nightmare of paranoia.
    I walk these streets at night
    and face my fears,
    palms sweating
    and fingertips that slip on the metal handle
    of my home.
    You brought your blood and shame,
    your "damaged goods,"
    and your tears.
    Why didn't you fight?!
    Why didn't you TRY?!
    Your answer is a broken sob
    that shatters the rage I'm drenched in.
    I pull your quivering flesh
    into a painful embrace
    and grasp your neck
    and squeeze.
    We will bring him down
    together.

    End: 10:27 pm
    Thursday, August 6, 2009




    Submitted on 2009-08-06 21:29:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This took balls. People always conform to the public opinion of such issues because they do not wish to be [censored]ized and forced to a chair to confess their every belief. Rape is an act of cowardice, and most victims of it respond with more of the same. There are many ways to exploit the cowardice in human nature, and this is just one of them. This took balls.

    But watch yourself...I have a few feminist facists on this site in mind that would yank your sack off for this write....I would name names, but I don't want to be next.
    (and i am in no way shape or form referring to anyone that has preceding comments to my own.)

    Kudos to the balls.
    But this was written in bad taste for your given audience.

    MyX
    | Posted on 2009-08-13 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I have to say I thought this was pretty good, but then, never having been raped myself, perhaps I'm not the best person to listen to.

    It didn't come across to me that the poem was saying it was the "fault" of the person who experienced this, but that blaming yourself for what occurred is probably the thought process the victim would go through.

    As far as "not being able to take negative reviews" goes, I sometimes have said Mo's work is good, sometimes not so good and she has always taken my comments well.

    I think even if a piece is really bad, comments should be constructive, as opposed to scathing, but I can't say much more as I don't know the full facts...

    ...Anyway, that's my shilling's worth...or something...

    -The Boy Alex.

    | Posted on 2009-08-10 00:00:00 | by alexboy | [ Reply to This ]
      NOTE TO READERS: This is a VICTIM we are dealing with, be sure that your comments are bland, don't involve what YOU think, and be NICE to her... tell her, It is WONDERFUL, or something she can suck on like a pacifier, cuz she doesn't do anything other than petting and ego-strokes...

    Hopefully, it will help tape her soul back together.


    ie, Mo's Reply to Recent Critique:

    Who said anything about purity? I was talking about strength and rape. I'm sure you have the ability to read.

    It doesn't matter if my poem inspired hatred of me within you. Since it made you feel something, it's good enough, and your judgement is worthless. *shrugs* Ya know?

    Plus, I'm a very sexual person. I love the physical touch, but emotional connection is not my game. You have judged me on one poem. Big whoop.

    Also, again, I was talking about strength and rape. I've been RAPED so that means that I'm NOT pure. Do you understand anything at all?

    -mo-
    | Posted on 2009-08-09 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      The Inner Split.... I see what you're doing, it's the mirror talking back. At the end, rage seals all damage up to a tightly rolled joint of Revenge.

    My ex told me, it's not rape until you say No. He dealt with things from his childhood by becoming a boxer, very much enjoyed hurting and hurting others as a personal therapy. If he pulled out the gloves on you, oh baby... you were in for it! Otherwise, just a fuzzy schizo teddybear. Guess rage doesn't always seal you watertight.
    | Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      now it could be that im reading this completely wrong and that im too full of PMS or rape experience to read it the way you intended it to be read but right now i think youre placing way too much emphasis on it being the fault of the person who was raped. i dont think your intention comes through very well

    unless you are of the opinion that rape equates to weakness

    the end hints revenge. hints that you care about this person and want to see the injustice put right but i dont know...

    i cannot seperate myself from myself to see anything good in this piece. sorry
    | Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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