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    dots Submission Name: Up Closedots
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    Author: mojymo
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 50/59/41
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 499
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 896



    Description:
       I like being close with people physically, but I have a problem getting personal with feelings and thoughts, which makes it hard for some people to take me seriously. I can be just as serious as I can be funny. But I promise you that there is no more than an gram of superficiality within me. ^_^


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    dotsUp Closedots
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    Up Close

    Let's get up close,
    in your face close,
    against your body close,
    but let's not make this personal.

    I don't want you to JUST hold my hand.
    I want your palm offered with a devious smile
    and that match in your eyes to come to life,
    stealing the oxygen in my lungs.

    I don't JUST want a peck on the cheek
    or a shy tongue darting between my chapped lips.
    I want a kiss that sizzles forever
    and cannot be cooled by water.

    And I don't JUST want your arm around my waist.
    I want an embrace that closes the time we spend apart.
    A hug that whispers as your arms smother my spine.

    Let's get close,
    THIS close.
    But let's not make it personal.

    End: 10:44 pm
    Thurs. August, 6, 09




    Submitted on 2009-08-06 21:53:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah, if you are not careful, you'll be helping him/her up the steps with their groceries the following morning. The words exchanged right before the act are crucial to this.

    The preferred perspective you seem to wish for others regarding your persona, would best be left to their imaginations derived from your work. Show don't tell applies to self explanation as well as writing. You should airhole the description you left. It smells like spraypaint.

    MyX
    | Posted on 2009-08-14 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      The best way to keep things impersonal, is to charge them afterwards for the sex. Whatever they thought they were feeling drains as fast as the color from their faces...

    and you'll have enough for a new pair of shoes and outfit later, so it's a win-win all around!
    | Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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