Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Stuck Within a Placedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 555
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 738



    Description:
       dedicated to my biological father whom does his best but the past seems to never cease


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsStuck Within a Placedots
    -------------------------------------------


    I've made things all the more complicated,
    Taken a place in your home,
    where I feel I do not exist.

    Abducted a place in your life in which was not reserved for me,
    I am unwanted.
    Owing you money,that is so badly needed,
    I am looked down upon for.

    I have invaded your world,
    Seizing a reserved area in your life.

    Unwanted at birth,
    Unwanted during childhood,
    Now unwanted in a time of need.

    Stuck within a place where depression eats from inside out,
    Nightmares always stalking.

    Last but certainly not least ...

    Stuck within a place where destructive behaviors only seem to thrive.




    Submitted on 2009-08-06 22:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I love reading your work. Be it random thoughts or rhyme. Your emotions always draw me in and captivate me. This one has done just that once again.
    I am here my friend always

    Heather
    | Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    177197

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    I'm here written by BloodtornAngel
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Incubus written by monad
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Promise written by annie0888
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Giving written by jjd
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    On Loop written by Daniel Barlow
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Commencement written by Ramneet
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    ME written by jjd
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry