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    dots Submission Name: Stuck Within a Placedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 540
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       dedicated to my biological father whom does his best but the past seems to never cease


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    dotsStuck Within a Placedots
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    I've made things all the more complicated,
    Taken a place in your home,
    where I feel I do not exist.

    Abducted a place in your life in which was not reserved for me,
    I am unwanted.
    Owing you money,that is so badly needed,
    I am looked down upon for.

    I have invaded your world,
    Seizing a reserved area in your life.

    Unwanted at birth,
    Unwanted during childhood,
    Now unwanted in a time of need.

    Stuck within a place where depression eats from inside out,
    Nightmares always stalking.

    Last but certainly not least ...

    Stuck within a place where destructive behaviors only seem to thrive.




    Submitted on 2009-08-06 22:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love reading your work. Be it random thoughts or rhyme. Your emotions always draw me in and captivate me. This one has done just that once again.
    I am here my friend always

    Heather
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