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16 / female / Texas
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oo. i wrote this a long time ago. it was over a break up and how i felt at the time. nothing really important. it has a weird rhyme scheme though. . .
so this is my reply
and i would like to ask why.
some say love is like a story book but i know better.
i say love is just a maze.
you take a wrong turn to a dead-end and then you get up and try again.
soon you'll make it to the end.
all you have to do is try.
now my dear, sweet boy. hear this. read my letter.
i will tell you how you wasted my days.
read what it says with this blood filled pen.
how i believe that you were just pretend.
how you made me cry.
you told me you cared.
and you held me through the darkest of nights.
you said you enjoyed all the times we shared.
and you made my face shine with delight.
and it was all a lie.
for all this, i was never prepared.
and you know what. your friends were right.
i hope you know you're my definition of despaired.
and that you made my hate ignite.
and this is my good-bye.
now my dear sweet girls. hear my advice.
not all boys are stupid.
some will actually suffice.
and soon you will also be hit by cupid.
you'll be on an all-time high.
he will love you.
be there for you.
he will laugh with you.
cry with you.
and before you know it, its just you two.
just you and that perfect guy.
Submitted on 2009-08-06 22:31:23
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