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    dots Submission Name: I am the Fooldots

    Author: Vermalin
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 15/29/21
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 925
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       I posted this before, but I didn't like the title I had for it. So I posed it again.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI am the Fooldots

    Hopelessly bound;
    by the chains of love's grip.
    - Greatest gift,
    fate's cruelest curse.

    Wherefore do I weep,
    at knowing the joy,
    the warmth,
    at feeling the peace;
    the fire.

    Wherefore do I weep
    unable to complete,
    to be,
    unknown the kiss;
    the flames.

    Wherefore do I weep,
    at loving, not living.
    Seeing, not touching,
    Breathing, not sharing,
    Holding, not loving?

    because I, The Fool,
    am no more?

    Submitted on 2009-08-07 02:14:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      For some reason this makes me think of a particular instance in my past where I longed for this one kid in high school. Completely infatuated, I tormented myself for a good two years memorizing myself with his existence. -bizarre memories to breathe life into once more.

    I haven't read the original post of yours concerning this work, but this title seems to be appropriate. Your delivery was well-executed.

    I look forward to reading more.

    | Posted on 2009-10-14 00:00:00 | by misschalloner | [ Reply to This ]

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