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Submission Name: In Your Head dots

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Author:	wretched_muse
ASL Info:	27/f/OH
Elite Ratio:	4 - 182/205/64
Words:	43

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	946
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	269

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im wrote this while thinking about a few people that i know, and how im really runing out of ways to help.

In Your Head dots

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I watch you kill yourself,
cut by cut.
scar over scar.
Never realizing why,
you went this far.

Was it really that bad,
the life you lead.
Or was the problem,
keeping it all in your head?

Submitted on 2004-07-19 00:29:30 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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that caused a realization in me, those who keep it in their heads often cannot be helped (I am one) all who have tried have failed and fortunately I am strange and argue myself out of death. I don't know if your friends are the same way(likely not) then they may be hope, but this pushed a button.
the rythem is a little funky, but it fits, good rhyme scheme.
-sjatos
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by whiteshadows | [ Reply to This ]
I like this one a lot, I like poems where you can describe a lot i a few words, and this one is like that. I love the feeling that is put in to it..
| Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by Nagow | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.