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    dots Submission Name: Mumma Quando dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Mumma Quando


    Its been a hot night
    For revolutions in bar rooms
    Full to the fashed and riotous din
    Whirl with half seen faces
    Beer glass to the brim
    Music thumping
    Clapping at the air

    Leaning on the bar
    Looking for something

    Vodka swallows with ice chinks
    And more drinks
    On eyes dangerously flirted
    Still looking for something
    Musicís screeching
    With guitar hero delivery

    Time to swim
    Mumma Quando in
    Mix of spirit, vino, and spices
    Sneaky little concoction
    For way past midnight staggers
    Mumma Quando

    When the night and faces have let you down
    One legless appetizer
    And then another and another
    Creeps its way down to your legs
    To leave you flat
    And flat on your back
    Mumma Quando
    Mother When

    The final piquant for a drunken night
    Slumped on a beach in full moon light
    To plastered to make the walk home

    Mumma Quando

    Itís the final forgetfulness
    Till the morning sun
    The swim silent in lulled waves
    To nothingness
    Mumma Quando
    Itís gonna hit me
    Canít tell you when
    Iíll ride its slingshot
    Right through till morning
    Wishing for slow harmonica dawns
    Hidden away in spirits, vino and spices

    Mumma Quando
    The ribald and revellers concocted
    For some madness existed
    In a Saturday night heaving bar room
    Full of half seen faces

    Still looking for something

    Mother when





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