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    dots Submission Name: I Should Godots
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    Author: dx10687
    ASL Info:    22 / M / IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 13/19/18
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsI Should Godots
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    Its time to go now
    I should go now
    Its for the best now
    I'm going to go now

    Its time for me to go
    I don't belong here anymore
    Everything looks so different
    I don't recognize anything or anyone

    Its time to go now
    I should go now
    Its for the best now
    I'm going to go now

    I need to get out of here
    This is isn't where I belong
    And it's finally getting to me
    I just need to go

    Its time to go now
    I should go now
    Its for the best now
    I'm going to go now

    It would be for the best
    Cause you don't see me for who I am
    I should be with others that see me for who I am
    Its for the best for me to go

    Its time to go now
    I should go now
    Its for the best now
    I'm going to go now

    I have to be gone
    I just need to go
    There is no going back
    This is the end

    Its time to go now
    I should go now
    Its for the best now
    I'm going to go now




    Submitted on 2009-08-07 17:03:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      its like the party is trying to convince themselves maybe to not go? like lingering maybe? could be interpreted that different ways...good work
    | Posted on 2009-08-09 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]
      the poem seems to be about walking away from a fight and not coming back to it. The only way I think you could make it better is to change up the main rhyme scheme. keep the nows and every other now out and just leave it as go
    | Posted on 2009-08-07 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]


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