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Submission Name: Endulged censes dots

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Author:	dismentled
ASL Info:	26/M/"South of Heaven"
Elite Ratio:	4.06 - 625/583/215
Words:	188

Class/Type:	Lyrics/Passion
Total Views:	88
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1334

Description:
got music for it, think slipknot meets static-x

Endulged censes dots

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I want it
I Need it
you got it;
CANT HAVE IT!

I want it
I Need it
you got it;
CAN'T HAVE IT!

I love this
I hate this
you breathe this;
CAN'T TAKE THIS!

I love this
I hate this
you breath this;
CAN'T TAKE THIS!

Jilted and hated
growth from decay,
pain and pleasure
its ALL The Same!
Wilted and weary
demised from hope?
Fuck these words
and all that I wrote!

I touch it
I Taste it
you feel it;
GOD HELP ME!

I touch it
I Taste it
you feel it;
GOD HELP ME!

I see it
I Smell it
you flaunt it;
JUST TAKE ME!

I see it
I Smell it
you flaunt it;
JUST TAKE ME!

Jilted and hated
growth from decay,
pain and pleasure
its ALL The Same!
Wilted and weary
demised from hope?
Fuck these words
and all that I wrote!

another tragic
lofty curse
you see, but don't
hear my verse
blind and stuttering
my last breathe
wasted on
the dumb and deaf!

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||| Comments |||
  I'm not a fan of the verses. Very very repetitive and nothing original in them. Very cliché.

However, with that being said i felt complied to write this comment with a huge thumbs up for the chorus. As everyone else pointed out, that censored line is by far and a way a very powerful statement with what you wrote.
Good job.
I'd change the verses by building on it and not being so repetitive and you'll have the perfect song.
| Posted on 2009-09-21 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
  fucking awesome lyrics
but honestly this feels SO incomplete without the music.
maybe it's just because I heard the music first?
idk. it just feels like it's only making a fraction of it's impact in this format,
still. I like this song a lot,
equal parts to music and words <3

+ of course,
I love you ! <3
| Posted on 2009-09-12 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Jilted and hated
growth from decay,
pain and pleasure
its ALL The Same!
Wilted and weary
demised from hope?
[censored] these words
and all that I wrote!

HOLY ****

"[censored] these words and all that I wrote" very powerful very moving your pissed in this write "duh" lol yet again another amazing write! Although I must admit the repeating got annoying but once I read the "[censored] these words and all that I wrote" it was worth it!!!

Jackz
| Posted on 2009-08-15 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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