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    dots Submission Name: A Little Cursed Flowerdots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This one was so random, wrote it for fun.


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    dotsA Little Cursed Flowerdots
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    I look around the flowery meadow,
    And my eyes caught a single bloom.
    I can't really say how I found it,
    Cause with all the others there was no room.

    The saphire petals were covered with others,
    It looked like it hadn't any room to have a breathe.
    It didn't get much sunlight,
    It was living, but close to death.

    The anger grew inside me,
    The other blooms hogged the light.
    I had to help the little flower,
    I had to do what's right.

    I grabbed the stems of the others,
    And pulled them one by one.
    The deed was taking over me,
    I stopped when the job was done.

    I looked around to see my work,
    And I stood in pure awe.
    Besides that little tiny blossom,
    The entire flowery meadow was gone.




    Submitted on 2009-08-09 08:32:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very emotional , your feelings are strong per paragraph , the descriptions sends out a special detail in your writing, images brings out what you are saying in this poem. well written. Chris
    | Posted on 2009-08-10 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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