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    dots Submission Name: Vaultsdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Interned within its restless growl
    Pacing with the instinctual foot
    The slide of back and forth, back and forth
    Prowls the barrier
    And fingers against the unknown dark

    Red Light District in its eagerness
    Of instinct
    Perceives this dark skin of its prison
    With a velvet hunger

    Too long, too quiet
    The portrait of captivity has scratched upon its soul
    Within the razor edge
    Rampages on a silent voice
    No more

    The flexing muscle of beast limbers
    By gentle intentions
    Or vicious revenge
    Has contracted and birthed from a somnolent womb
    A discerning animal

    Cracks in the walls of its own asylum
    Prismatic the air with choices of
    And freedom

    Madness some may see it
    Some may call it


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