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    dots Submission Name: Tempo Purdahdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    dotsTempo Purdahdots

    Tempo Purdah

    Drag this breath from me
    Its last expulsion into the listless midnight
    Of ignored reminders

    Reject of love it hung there
    Within the blue glare of over cooked
    Against the suns waving hands of palms
    They carried its metronome tempo

    “ Nothing is going to happen ”
    Whispered the emptying glass of bottomless
    In laden breezes of heat
    Repeats the melting ice
    On soirées sycophantic collected diaphones that cool the tongue from screaming

    You my love; leave me haunted
    In the vagaries of poetry

    To collect nothing but the beginnings
    Of every breath I breathe

    I hang between

    And the allure of “ not ”
    Not anymore; to bury this needles point of yearning
    Into a pillow which hides my weeping

    And not to look out with eyes which do not see you
    Behind their lost brown
    Of self wrote in emptiness
    Smacks every stranger they meet, with sadness

    Whispered the empty glass to its bottomless
    Dissolving in ice in the relentless heat
    So its vapours can catch this last breath from me
    Against the empty tempo of the suns waving hands
    And stop my tongue from screaming

    Drag this breath from me
    Its last expulsion into the listless midnight
    Of ignored reminders

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