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    dots Submission Name: A Moment in Timedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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    dotsA Moment in Timedots
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    You and I,
    we were something else!
    For a moment in time I was content
    For a moment in time I was happy

    Though with time we seem to fall apart,
    things were not as they were.
    We got over our differences
    We accepted each other

    Yet this was not enough as time went on,
    For that moment in time has come and gone.

    I am letting you go baby,
    I am moving on.

    We had it all,
    in a moment in time
    but that moment is gone and time as taken its toll on my body and heart!

    I am moving on...




    Submitted on 2009-08-09 16:58:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is good! It has the style of a poetic muse, with the artist poetically making note of experiences past, but treasured. Much of life is in having an experience, living it and savoring it, and moving on with the memory of it forever attached. The heart knows when to go, even when the mind doesn't!
    | Posted on 2009-08-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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